The Last Page Comments - Laura & ChanFly

The story is funny with a great twist at the end.  The price for the book is completely ridiculous but you basically forget that part of the story with all of the issues about the last page and the fact that the tips in the book seem to be working for the boy.  You tell the story with a good interplay of shots.  This is really well done.  Since it looks like he is getting the girl then maybe the book was worth the price he paid?

The Inside Man Comments - Ding & Ester

I was a bit confused on first viewing but a second viewing and I understood more of the action with the brothel and the other elements.  The flashback portion is really nice.  You provide a good variety of shots and the story is visually interesting.  The story problem I have is that this secret, "inside man," is not being very careful about who might be learning that he is actually a police man.  You need the searching to tell the joke but there must be a more subtle way to do it to keep the core premise of the story alive.  The core premise appears to be that this is an undercover cop working in a criminal organization.

Red And Blue Comments - Bryan & Chak

It's nice to see the crazy brothers do something nicely dramatic, but you did keep the brother connection in your work.  The story is very nice and you use a good variety of shots to tell it.  I think the fact that Blue gives Red the toy while he is in the hospital is a bit confusing.  The rest of the piece is very realistic and I guess that sets off my "is it possible for a boy sick in the hospital to go shopping for a toy for his brother" alarm.  I completely understand the reason for it being in the story but it feels awkward.  It would work better if Blue gives Red a robot because of Red's effort in making himself a robot and because it seemed like a very selfish moment when he asked his mother for a robot.  Then the giving of the robot, rather than a car, becomes an important part of the storytelling because it directly connects the actions and reactions of the two boys.

DGC Information Day Comments - Michelle & Calvin

It is a well drawn storyboard and you get in a nice variety of shots.  The story is obviously creepy and I guess it is inspired by the new gray and black building.  It would have been good to hold back the horror a bit longer than you did.  I wish I had a better evil power than drinking "blood coke."  It would be nice if there was some kind of twist at the end to tie the pieces together or make you think they just "imagined" the  whole horrific situation.

Snow White Comments - Cuttle & Vicky

The story gets a little aggressive but it is an interesting turn on the traditional story.  I guess the underwater castle has breathable air inside (I am always worried about the scientific reality of a story environment)  If you are going to have horns sprout from  her head then you should do it on both sides.  That way audience members will know exactly what is going on and the way she is changing from the Snow White most people know.  The story works visually but I got a bit lost in the "this is my new invention" portion of the storyboard.  Another thing is the use of X in the eyes of the fish.  This may be something that is used in anime but from my experience X in the eyes of an animal means that the animal is dead.  If the fish is dead then I find this part a bit confusing.

Killer Comments - Christy & Kitty

I have to admit being a bit confused the first time I looked through the storyboard.  But on a second viewing I picked up the details I missed and then connected with the game as training for killing people on earth theme.  Please confirm with me that this is the theme.  It is nice that you have the parallel place but that games are used for very different reasons.  The storyboard shows a good variety of shots and gives enough of the story that it could be developed even further.

The Ice Cream Comments - Candy & Helena

Overall this is a very nice story about a day in the play park.  Within the sequences you do a good job of mixing your angles and fields of view.  The transitions between scenes and locations are not as strong and you need to apply some of the same shot change techniques when moving from one part of the story to the next.  Change angle of view but more importantly change field of view.  When you transitioned from the flat to the park you could have done of happy kids and activities in the park sort of montage.  This would have taken the audience from one location to the next.  This would also work well with the three shots of amazement that you have with the little boy as he enters the park.  The montage would have given visual reference points for the three "waa" expressions.  It would be nice if there was a larger theme the played out in relation to the ice cream but this is a good slice of life story as it currently exists.